Outside of the military, nobody knows what the NCOIC for the S-4 shop in the BSC means. They definitely don’t care how many radios you know how to program, or what the organizational structure for any naval vessel looks like.
The problem here is that veterans tend to miss the forest for the trees. In using military language, they force themselves to contextualize everything instead of communicating the most valuable parts.
Find out what language civilians in the position you are looking for use to describe their work and use the same language to describe your own work. NCOIC for multiple logistics details can become “supply project manager”. There are many ways to communicate what kind of work you did without resorting to military jargon. The successful veteran will adapt her language to reflect the target environment, not the most recent one.
There are many common pitfalls for military veterans, but these 3 are easily the most common. Be diligent about avoiding these mistakes and you will stand out in the job market. Find someone else to help you if need be, and you’ll find ways to polish even more. Before long, you’ll find yourself negotiating multiple job interviews, and you’ll be glad you put in the work up front.